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Phreke in Akron by coffeenoir Phreke in Akron by coffeenoir
A homeless persons bedroom, found under a bridge near downtown Akron. They have done their best to make this a comfortable place to spend their nights.

For :icongimmefeedback:

I was wondering if this shot captured the saddness, and the need for us all to have a place to call home?

see this same place in winter
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:iconbabou-shka:
Babou-Shka Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2013
Very nice and touching photo. You can feel the loneliness and that need to feel like home very well.
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for looking and for the comments, it was really something to find that place. 
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:iconbabou-shka:
Babou-Shka Featured By Owner Oct 24, 2013
You're welcome :)
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Bozack Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2011
Wow, that's really sad - you captured it great! I especially think the leafed branch left there, perhaps to make it more homely, is a little sad - when one has to do stuff like that to get ones sleeping place a little more homely, it's just sad.

This was for #GimmeFeedback :)
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
It was very sad, yet somehow it showed the human spirit has this need to survuve and to make a space for it's own. We personalize our environment.
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RadVisual Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2011
hehe nice place reminds me jesus of suburbia music video (i dont know why ;P )
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Mar 9, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Interesting, it has been a while since I saw that video, I will have to look it up! Thanks fhough, I am taking that as a comliment! :D
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2011   Writer
:icongimmefeedback:

A photo like this one tells quite a long story in just one shot.
I know writers would call a story written about it a "one shot."
You captured the colors of the graffiti-type 'stake-out' name on the wall above the old couch, a quasi bed (a fold-out couch) perfectly. The blues, whites and reds go very well together, and the general decay of the location is even more poignant with that dead branch over the bed.
Perhaps the branch was once used as shade for a resting homeless person in that area. I'm so taken with this photo (even the floral patterns on the cast away couch) I think about it a lot, and consider writing a short piece about "Phreke," a person who uses good art to make a claim on a 'room with a view' to live in.

Then of course there's the second, winter photo of the same area, with everything burned away. It's poignancy reaches like an arrow in the heart then, to see that. Who burned it? Why? Another amazing photo by *coffeenoir ... :+fav: Thank you.
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coffeenoir Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much for the comments. I find I often think of this location, and wonder what or who resided here. Not lomg ago there was an article in the Akron paper about the number of homeless and "couch surfers". I guess that among the known homeless here are a former physician and banker among others.

I would feel it to be an honor if you were to use this setting to write a story.

I appreciate your support and kind words. :hug:
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2011   Writer
If I don't "Phreke" out about health problems, I probably will.
I'm definitely interested.
I appreciate your photography.
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
When I have a chance to sit in front of the computer without being so tired I plan on reading your two newest pieces. I also have some from another deviant to read that I have been saving forever. :noes:
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2011   Writer
:sleep:
Take your time.
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I am planning to get to them either today or tomorrow. Meghan has no class today so we may have a movie day!
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011   Writer
Have fun! Lots of fun!
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Feb 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
We ended up watching this T.V. show, called The Big Bang Theory. It is pretty funny, my family is back to feeling ill, so it was a good diversion.
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Anuruddha23 Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2011  Student Interface Designer
this really is a interesting photo, though i don't think you quite captured as much of the sadness something like this could convey. first thing i would do is convert it to black and white, usually that helps when trying to convey sadness. i would have also tried shooting from different angles and zooms, just shoot a bunch and see what works. and the ultimate element of any photo to convey sadness is actually having someone sitting there, but you can't always control that.
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coffeenoir Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you for the comments. I looked at this as a black and white photo, but really felt that the colors of the graffitti added something that just didn't come through in b&w. I appreciate your thoughts and hope that you find other works to comment on!
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Anuruddha23 Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2011  Student Interface Designer
if you have photoshop you could try making it b&w and keeping the graffiti color
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I actually do not have photoshop! I played with Gimp a little bit.
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Anuruddha23 Featured By Owner Feb 2, 2011  Student Interface Designer
you can do it with gimp too, just check youtube, there should be tutorials
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Feb 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't know why I never think of youtube for tutorials. It looks like Gimp is a pretty good program. I still haven't moved completely into the digital age!
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Anuruddha23 Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2011  Student Interface Designer
yup, there's soooo much stuf on youtube now a days
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
So true!
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DMONTE0270 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2010
This is really nice! I've always wanted to find a place like this. :D
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
To photograph, or are you looking to move?
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DMONTE0270 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2010
Photograph. And to sit there. . .for inspiration! Why move?
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I wasn't sure, thought maybe you needed a new place! :lol: It is a great place to photograph, I plan on going back soon.
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DMONTE0270 Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2010
Oh yeah. . . Although I feel as if that is my future residence :/
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Dec 22, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I always feel as though I am one paycheck away myself! Hope that you are doing better than that! I hope to have the chance this weekend (maybe) to go get some shots of it in the winter. Look for them!:santa:
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DMONTE0270 Featured By Owner Dec 23, 2010
I will. Where I live we have little nooks and crannies. I don't live in a big city so there isn't much! I'm still a student XD
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coffeenoir Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Count yourself lucky, enjoy being a student, learn a lot! I haven't ventured out yet, except to shop yesterday.
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VAngelLJ Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:icongimmefeedback:

I think you've done well at capturing this, but if you edit it a little to change the lighting and maybe desaturate the colours a little more - so it is closer to a higher contrast monochromatic image - I think it would help to capture the feeling even more. Perhaps adding a light blur around the edges of the image (but not too much) to draw focus to the fact that there is a bed there but nothing else as well. At the moment the focus lies more on the grafitti rather than the 'bedroom'.
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I appreciate the feedback, I did actually play with a higher contrast but really didn't care for the result. I do see what you are saying about the focus, I thought that this emphasized the need to decorate the space in which we inhabit. I like the idea of blurring the edges. Thanks again!
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VAngelLJ Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2010  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome ^^
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alihanman Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2010
Wow, looks kinda sad!
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I believe so too...Thanks for the comment!
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GingerbreadHaus Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2010
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Wow, this shot is truly emotional. The composition truly captures the emptiness of the setting, from the graffiti on the wall to the dirt underneath--it gives off a feeling of lonliness and a need for something to fill that empty space. The couch and the matress appear very comfortable in the midst of all this desolation, however. This image not only talks about emptiness but also illustrates that we have so much we take for granted. Absolutely beautiful and extremely deep.
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coffeenoir Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I appreciate the comments, I feel that this has been a successful shot. It seems to be getting it's message out. Thanks for the feedback!
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AsylumEmpress Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2010  Hobbyist
This is so thought provoking....it almost looks like they tried to prop up the tree limb maybe for decoration...and it just looks like SO MUCH more than just a place to sleep. It's so evident that this isnt a bed...and it isnt just a place where someone can lie down at night...it's home...or at least "home for now"....and that is so sad. You nailed it...you captured it amazingly!!
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coffeenoir Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, very well said. That is exactly the feeling I got from being there. I also felt like I was intruding while I was there. Thanks for the comments!
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AsylumEmpress Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2010  Hobbyist
yes....almost seems like we should have permission to come inside...makes you want to meet the person who calls it home and hear their story
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:iconcoffeenoir:
coffeenoir Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I have thought about heading back down there to see if they are still there. I have wondered about their story.
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Doodlee-a Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2010  Student Digital Artist
That looks strangely comfortable, despite the lack of warmth in the photography. I find the blue of the mattress pulls the viewer in. The background seems a little unfocused, but I guess that can be expected with the area. I like the branches draped over the back of the couch!
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coffeenoir Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks for the comments! I appreciate you taking the time!
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Doodlee-a Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2010  Student Digital Artist
But of course!
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coffeenoir Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
:thunbsup:
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djwedo Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
like this!! [link] :D
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coffeenoir Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
The link didn't work, was it to Homeless? Nice shot. You have a wonderful gallery.
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djwedo Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
oh! sorry, yes it was homeless.
thanks so much!
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coffeenoir Featured By Owner Aug 3, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem, nice shot.
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